copy received for review
Concept/story idea gets 4.5 stars
Character development gets 2.5
overall execution gets 2
editing gets... 1
Use of present tense was jarring and highlighted the weaknesses in the writing. Felt a bit like a rough draft.
Definitely had potential, but wanted a lot more polish.
This would be a cool episode of Criminal Minds... ;)
Overall, though, not so much. Three stars feels a bit generous, but it was a good concept. Characters were sketchy. Random lesbian scene felt really unnecessary.
Just didn't work for me.